Edward+Cho's+SoC+paragraph

He woke up, and there it was. A big red ball staring at him asking "Oh, It's you again". Nothing seems to fascinate this old man, as well as nothing is fascinated in him. Never been challenged, he was never given a chance to develop his own identity. Did he ever have a dream? Nobody will ever learn the truth of this question. His daily routine did not annoy anyone. "Stictly" normal, it was: Woke up, got in to his car, went to a close market to pick up a small box of cereal with a gallon of milk and then he spent his rest of the day in front of the swimming pool staring at the sky. Beep- and the camera turned off. "Good job Edward, that's it for today! see you next monday." Edward, a voice actor finished his duty and he's off to home now. The movie's title was "ideal life style for modern era." This simple question remained in his head in his car way to his home "Why is everybody dreaming to live a dreamless life?."

Kevin G Lee's comment: Kind of confusing for me but that may just be me, otherwise good third person paragraph.

Mingoo Park's comment: Very unique story. I think that you should have made the story more clear though. Also, you should capitalize the title of the movie. Other than that, good job!

Jenny Lee's comment : I really like that the beginning and the end is a total different story. As they mentioned it is a bit unclear. It could have been better if you talked a little bit more about the character Edward and what he thought. good job:)

Corie Hahn's comment: I thought that your story was very well written out and that I could see some personality into your story. However, maybe you should try making it more concise? But other than that, good job!