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Rough Draft – Persuasive Speech  How would you feel if you were kicked out of a hotel after your payment? Before moving on, I would like to address the definition of a school. School is a place where students learn, socialize, and have fun. Furthermore, unlike public schools, KIS students pay around $25000 a year to come to this school. However, KIS prohibits students from staying after school is over. What kind of system is this? This is unreasonable and students should have the right to stay after school to have a place for students to work on their group projects, to get help from teachers, and to socialize with friends.

Most of the group projects at KIS deal with creating I Movies or some sort of presentations. If school is prohibited for students to use the facility, students must meet up at one of their houses. This is not a great idea because students may live apart from each other and will take most of the time going and coming back to places. Especially, if the project is due on weekdays, it just ruins students schedule for other subjects. Instead, if students gather at school, they could easily do their work after school and go home using the after school bus. There have been numerous incidents where students stayed after school to do their projects. It is possible for students to just stay after and fool around. However, students are not that foolish. The pressure of getting good grades will motivate students to actually get on task and work on the project within the scarcity of time.

Education is the first priority of attending a school. If a student is falling behind class or has sport events that will make them miss classes, they should have time out side of class to ask for help to their teachers. Although lunch time is available, most teachers have duty and time is limited. It is not fair for these students to not get extra help. Therefore, there is one and only solution, staying after school. It is a great opportunity for both the student body and the admission to achieve their goals. Students can benefit from learning and the school benefits from students doing well on their standardized tests or other measures.

Let’s go back to the old days when we stayed after school and played soccer or hanged out with our friends. It was time for us to build friendship and time for us to get to know each other. By restricting staying on campus afterschool, it limits students’ use of the facility for their social gatherings. For example, students can prepare for a dance practice or a friendly soccer match after school. This not only helps the students to reinforce their extracurricular activities, but it also provides students a place to have fun.

In conclusion, with the definition of school and the payment each student pays to KIS, students should have the right to stay after school to do their group projects, get help from teachers, and socialize with friends. If KIS prohibits students to use the school like it should be used, then KIS is nothing but a jail where students have no freedom and have to follow strict rules.

Final Draft Seung Woo Eun 22 Sept. 2009 English 11 F   Ms. Jacob Irony of School How would you feel if you were kicked out of a hotel right after you paid? Currently, there is an issue about the after school policy at KIS. The admissions have decided to ban students from staying on campus because they fear of students getting hurt. Before moving on, I would like to address the definition of a school. School is a place where students learn, socialize, and have fun. Moreover, school is a place where students learn to prepare themselves to the real world. However, KIS prohibits students from staying after school. This is ironic because KIS should actually support student’s freedom and individuality rather than creating rules so that students are under watched. What kind of system is this? What kind of school kicks its students out of the campus? This is unreasonable; therefore, students should have the rights to stay after school where they can work on their group projects, socialize with friends, and grow up as individuals. Most of the group projects at KIS deal with creating iMovies, podcasts, or some sort of presentations. If school prohibits students to use the facility, then students must meet up at one of their houses. This is not a great idea because students may live apart from each other and will waste time going and coming back to places. Especially, if the project is due on weekdays, meeting up will ruin students’ schedules for other subjects. Instead, if students gather at school, they could easily do their work after school and go home riding the after school bus. According to Iljee Kam, a senior at KIS, she strongly believes that working on group projects at school is most efficient because it saves time and money. Furthermore, she argues that working outside of school increases the risk of danger. Apart from Iljee, many students complain about having to meet up somewhere else knowing that they would have to stay the whole night up finishing other homework. As the admissions say, it is possible for students to stay after school and fool around, but what are the chances? KIS high school students are not that foolish. The pressure of getting good grades will motivate students to actually get on task and make them work on the project within the scarcity of time. Let’s go back to the old days when we stayed afterschool on a sunny day to play soccer or socialize with our friends without any supervision. Just imagine the happy faces and noises of students talking and playing with each other. It was time for us to build friendship and time for us to get to know each other. Restricting students to stay on campus afterschool limit their use of facility as a social gathering. For example, students can create a friendly soccer match or a dance practice for the upcoming social. This not only helps the students to reinforce their extracurricular activities, but it also provides students a place to have fun. According to a research, it states that the use of school space involves developing relationships more than anything else. Furthermore, the use of the school facilities actually helps students to have more school spirit. This social gathering is similar to that of a church where people stay after their sermon. Because the church people continuously integrate, they build a fine relationship. Thus, KIS students should also have the opportunity to build good friendships through activities using school space. My father always told me stories about his high school life and how it affected him the most. He and his friends stayed after school to study, play, and mingle where they talked about how life is so tiring and which girls they liked. He once got into a big trouble by breaking a glass window, but he told me that he learned his life lesson. This is not just to present a story, but is actually to inform how students grow as adults. School is a place that teaches students to make the right choices in later lives. However, if school puts too much emphasis on supervision, then students will be like robots that are controlled by human beings. Growing up as individuals and getting ready for the real world requires students to have freedom. A survey from group of teachers show that students actually learn more from their own mistakes than school teaching them what to do. At times in life, one has to make a choice. If one were under supervision every single time in one’s life, one would have difficulty in making the right choice. It is okay to make mistakes in life, but when is the most important factor. Students, if they do make mistakes, should make them earlier in life so that they do can avoid making wrong choices in the future. Therefore, students should be given freedom to stay on campus and start making their own choices to grow as an individual. In conclusion, students should have the right to stay on campus after school without any supervision so that they have a place to work, socialize, and get ready for the real world. Once again, school is a place where students learn and have fun, not a jail under strict surveillance. Just like citizens have citizen rights, so do students have rights to stay on campus. If the admission becomes a monarch and does not wish to hear the student body, the term “school” should be erased from KIS. The student body will continuously complain the irony of the school rules until they are changed. How much more ironic can it be than a school forcing students out of the campus rather than welcoming them?