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=A Walk =

She was walking down the street in front of her house seeming to enjoy nature. Although it seemed like she did not have a clear destination of where she was going, she knew what she was looking for. Continuing to wander down the street, she passed a deserted playground and an empty road except for parked cars. Walking for another minute or so, she crossed the street and climbed the stairs in front of her and she was at a park. What would she do at a park all of a sudden? At the park, there were golden bell and cherry blossom on each side creating an endless road of flowers. There were many people especially people in their fifties who were exercising. There were many people with bicycles too. People seemed to be everywhere and the park was more crowded than usual. Then, a dog in a leash came running toward her and she quickly moved out of the way as the owner and the dog passed running. After, she began to walk again and she ended up going all the way to the next town and exited the park entering the crowded road where cars were honking and zooming past. She ended up in a road but lost her way and crossed two more streets hoping to find a destination but nothing happened except she continued to walk.

Mingoo's comment: Interesting story. I can see that you know how to write in third person point of view. However, your story can be a little bit more interesting I think. Nice work!