Persuasive+speech+evaluations-Sejin+Paik

Kristie Lee evaluations: Jin Kwon evaluations:
 * SEJIN PAIK'S PEER EVALUATION: **

Wonkyung (Alena) Koo:

Sarah Cho:

Nathan Cho:

Daeun Lee:

Alice Ahn:

Lauren Kang: Nana was absent on the day.

Priscilla Kim. [|PE of S [sejin.pages]] Ji Yoon Hyun:

Cindy Choi:

Amy Choi:

Olivia Edwards:

//T hese past several weeks in class, we've taken a look at several historical orators and public speakers and thoroughly analyzed the way they speak. The fascinating commonality among these speakers was that they all had a purpose and cause for their presentations. Whether we took turns reading people's speeches in class or we read it silently to ourselves, the words themselves was filled with confidence and the strong urge to move the audience. These historical speakers were not just there to communicate with the audience or the crowd, but they were there to actually inspire the people and persuade them to understand their stance. And that is how I wanted to take this persuasive speech assignment: to persuade and inspire the audience with what I had to say. That is also the reason why I chose the topic about identity. Knowing that other students will talk about issues such as policies in the school, or constant pressure from academics, I wanted to take a step back and look into the individual lives of the students and how they contribute to the KIS school environment. Ever since coming to this school, I saw a huge cultural mix between Korean culture and American culture and how identities are sometimes unable to be distinctively distinguished. I observed how myself and even friends around me seem to be faking their identity and trying to be something they are not; simply because of friends or environmental pressure. However, I wanted to point out to everyone that it is important to choose their own identity and believe in who they are, rather than listening or relying on others. This ability to develop upon oneself is so important, not only in our high school years, but also when we grow up and have to live in the social world.
 * SEJIN'S OWN TWO PARAGRAPH EVALUATION: **

About the content of my speech, I tried to make many of my points toward an emotional aspect rather than logical, since my topic was slightly toward emotions than factual persuasion. Due to this imbalance, I think there were lack of evidence to fully support my claim, resulting in students not clearly understanding in what I was trying to say. I feel that next time I write a similar essay, I should consider not only what the speech has in-stored for me, but how others would perceive it as well. Also, overall, I skipped around ideas too much, making the audience confused or even challenged. I should definitely consider these points for next time and make my speech more focused on my stance and organizing them in a mannerly way. Some other students critiqued about the presentation part of my speech and how I gave too many pauses, or the tone of my voice was too casual. I realize now that even though I practiced couple of times by myself, it is important to practice in front of a friend or an audience to hear what they have to say. I did not think that people would see my speech as casual, but it was certainly something I learned to avoid and to always watch out for. I think this process of evaluating others and also looking back at what everyone else had to say helped me and is going to help me in the future tremendously. I take all of my classmates words sincerely and thank everyone for taking the time to evaluate my speech. //