Rachel+Choi+Stream+of+Consciousness

Spanish Test Rachel Choi 

The day began as she opened her eyes. It was only 6:20. She wanted ten more minutes of sleep. She, again, closed her eyes and snuggled under her blanket. When she glanced at her alarm clock again, it was 7 'o clock. Why did I fall back asleep? I cannot recall. She rushed to the bathroom and got ready for school. As she was preparing, she thought how she woke up at 6 o' clock yesterday. I had time to eat breakfast, at least. She arrived and as she walked into the class she remembered that she had Spanish test after lunch. She decided to study for it during lunch time and believed that she would be able to manage it. Although she tried to stop thinking about Spanish test, she could not. She was nervous. My God, why did I not study on the bus? I am a good student, but now I am having second thoughts. Her face expressions made the other students wonder. "What is wrong? Did you get a low grade on a test?" She wondered inside her mind, as well. "Am I going to fail Spanish test? How much would my Spanish grade drop?" The situation made her feel sick and want to go home. If I had one more day, I can definitely get an A on the test. I have all the notes. She felt tears in her eyes and blamed herself for not remembering it last night. No, there is no use in regretting what had already happened. She decided to focus in her AP world history class. When the lunch time approached, she started to worry even more. As she walked down the hallway, her friend Jenny casually said, "Hey, don't forget the Spanish test tomorrow!" Oh, no, the test is tomorrow?

Paul B. - Though it might be somewhat beyond the reviews regarding the context of the story, the impression I first got from the title was reasonably positive. On top of the great headline, the author makes a great use of transitions between the narrator and the character's inner thoughts. The comments and quotes in the story really builds up the story line, making the plot more realistic and ordinary. Although the story reflects upon the efforts put in to this story, the transitions from one description to the next are usually awkward, potentially confusing readers of who is talking.

Yoonji Reem - Your story line is good and it was easy to understand. However, at some point, you quotations blocked the flow of the writing because it was slightly confusing. But overall, it was great!